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The graph shows the amount of money spennt on books in Germany , France , Italy and Austria between 1995 and 2005.

The graph shows the amount of money spennt on books in Germany , France , Italy and Austria between 1995 and 2005.
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The given line graph provides information about the amount of expenditure on
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 in four countries in a given period of ten years.
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, more funds were spent on books in Germany throughout the given period as compared to other Countries
Although
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, the number of revenue on books was few at the onset in Australia,
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, it surpassed Italy
at the end
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 of the period. Both nations experienced fluctuations.
To begin
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 with, in 1995, the expenditure on books in Germany was exactly 80
million
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dollars
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. The figure increased Significantly to approximately 90
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 in the next four years and began to decline gradually to about 85
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dollars
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 in 2003 until it experienced a significant increase to approximately 95
million
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dollars
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 in the
last
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 year which was the highest amount of money spent as opposed to other territories. The expenses in France were about 55
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dollars
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 which was 5
million
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dollars
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 higher than in Italy.
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, both countries witnessed fluctuations from 1997 to 2003 until reaching an amount of 65
million
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dollars
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 in France and just above 60
million
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dollars
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 in Italy. With regards to Australia, even though, the revenue was few
initially
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,
however
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, it experienced a sharp increase to about 60
million
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dollars
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 in 2005.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words million, dollars with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fluctuations" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • expenditure
  • trend
  • increase
  • decrease
  • peak
  • surge
  • decline
  • fluctuate
  • steady
  • comparison
  • significant change
  • spending patterns
  • economic conditions
  • cultural factors
  • cross-country comparison
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