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Why don’t people take environmental issues seriously in spite of being given many warning by scientists? Why don’t people save energy in their daily life? Discuss the possible causes of these phenomena and give possible solutions.

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Some
people
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 from all over the world don't take environmental
issues
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 seriously.Scientists warned
people
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 about the damage it can make.In
this
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im
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I'm
 going to talk about the causes of these
issues
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 and give a solution to
it
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them
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. First,
people
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 cut down a huge
amount
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 of trees every year but never replant them.
that
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 might cause the
amount
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 of O2
is
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being made will go down.
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,cutting down trees might destroy some
animals
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animal's
animals'
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 habitats like birds and
deers
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deer
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 as sometimes animals use them to hide from
other preditor
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another preditor
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.
For
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example
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,In
USA
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the USA
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 more than 5000 are being cut down every month but the government
dont
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don't
 regrow them.Second of all,some countries throw their trash
in
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into
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 the sea but they
dont
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don't
 see the damage it did and they
also
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 do explosive
experements
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experiments
 in the deep ocean.
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,the
water
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 in some countries is not clean
water
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 to drink so they need to put some chemicals into it so
people
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 can drink it.
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example
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,In
africa
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Africa
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people
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dont
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don't
 have clean
water
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 there so some
people
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 buy the ''living straw'' it contains a huge
amount
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 of chemicals
so
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it can make the
water
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 pure but not fully clean.
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,some
enviromental
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environmental
issues
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 come from wars as
smoke
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the smoke
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 gets mixed up with pure air
then
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 it will make it full of
jerms
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germs
 plus a multitude number of plants will die and animals too.
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,it can destroy buildings and some
people
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 can get injuries or even die.
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example
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,
the
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in the
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 war between
kuwait
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Kuwait
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 and
iraq
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Iraq
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 as
iraq
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Iraq
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 started the war as they want the oil
kuwait
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Kuwait
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 has that
the
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they
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 have but in a low
amount
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 so
the
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they
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 destroyed and killed a lot of the
people
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 and
they
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apply
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also
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 killed a lot of plants,plus the sky turned black as
their
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there
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 was a lot of smoke coming out from the oil
the
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they
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 have burned plus they threw oil in the
sea
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seawater
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water
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 became
non drinkabale
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non-drinkabale
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water
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 for almost a five months. First of all,
their
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there
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 are many solutions for
thes
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these
issues
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 like planting more trees and
give
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giving
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animasls
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animals
 new habitats or building
a
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an
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 air
purefing
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purifying
 company or cleaning the ocean with modern technology devices.
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,countries need to help
ach
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each
 other
insted
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instead
 of starting
war
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a war
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 over money or resources plus
prople
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people
 have to stop throwing their trash in the streets or on the beach as
wind
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the wind
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 sometimes blows them away into the ocean.
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example
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,doing a
cheraty
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charity
 for cleaning the sea and streets so
people
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 can live a healthy
life style
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lifestyle
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 without them being sick or catching a cold
beacuese
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because
 of
jerms
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germs
 in the air. In
conclusion
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 it is clear to see that there are many reasons why
people
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 do not save energy in their daily life.
However
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, there are many solutions to solve
this
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 problem.
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