You recently attended a training course for your work. Your employer has asked you for your feedback on the training course. Write a letter to your employer. In your letter remind your employer what the course was about explain why the course was useful to you in your work suggest why the course may not be suitable for some of your other colleagues
Dear Mr Green,
I am writing to submit my feedback about the training
course
I attended last
week. The content of this
course
is related to how to plan strategies on a daily job basis.
I personally believe that there are many useful
information and advanced technology we can use in our company. Change preposition
of useful
Firstly
, this
course
suggests different stages using different platforms and technology to prioritize our timetable, which would save a lot of time.
Secondly
, it also
suggests us
Correct pronoun usage
we
to
minimize the range of our customers in different aspects and areas, compared to our previous plan, we were trying to maximise our customer range, it would waste a lot of costs but no more rewards and profit. Fix the infinitive
apply
This
different approach can help us to reduce our costs.
Furthermore
, considering the content of this
course
, I suggest that all of our managers can be taken
Wrong verb form
take
this
course
, but it is not suitable for juniors.
Thanks for your arrangement to give me this
opportunity to accept new knowledge. I am looking forward to it will bring us big change in our industry.
Yours faithfully,
TinaSubmitted by guojingchang0426 on
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coherence cohesion
The letter is not well-structured. There are multiple ideas presented in a disorganized manner. Each paragraph should focus on only one main idea, and the ideas should be logically connected.
task achievement
The greeting and closing are appropriate, but the overall response does not fully address the task requirements. The letter should provide a clear reminder of the course, explain in detail why the course was useful, and suggest why the course may not be suitable for some colleagues.