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The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The table shows where the money came from and the charts show how it was distributed. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The table shows where the money came from and the charts show how it was distributed. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The table provides data about
police
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the police
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 budget for 3 different groups
in
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apply
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over the 2 years period between 2017 and 2018
while
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 the charts
illustrates
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illustrate
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 how the
money
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 was spent.
Overall
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, it is an obvious fact that all sections of
police
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the police
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 budget increased
however
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 the
money
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was
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apply
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spent
one
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on one
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 field maintained the same level.
According to
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table
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the table
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, the number of
money
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that was
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was
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apply
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got by
national
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the national
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 government grew slightly from 175.5m to 177,8m.
Also
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, the
money
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 for local taxes went up from 91.2m
with
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to
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 11.1m in 2017-2018 years.
Furthermore
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, the least increasing belonged to other sources
such
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 as grants and
this
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 quantity was equal to 38.5m with 0.5 growth.
Total
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The total
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 budget rose from 304.7m by 13.9m to 318.6m from 2017 to 2018. İn addition to these, wages for police officers and
member
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members
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 of the staff decreased from 75% to 69%.
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, the
percent
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percentage
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 of
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money
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the money
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 for
technology
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the technology
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 group climbed by 6% to 14%.
Besides
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, the proportion of buildings and transport remained stable
with
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at
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 17
percent
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per cent
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.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words money, m with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Fiscal allocations
  • Revenue streams
  • Budgetary oversight
  • Expenditure
  • Financial appropriation
  • Government grants
  • Local taxation
  • Operational costs
  • Capital investment
  • Public safety
  • Crime prevention
  • Community policing
  • Resource allocation
  • Year-on-year comparison
  • Budgetary constraints
  • Fiscal year
  • Fund disbursement
  • Budget deficit/surplus
  • Trend analysis
  • Financial sustainability
  • Law enforcement funding
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