In some cultures children are encouraged to compete against each other. What are the advantages and disavantages of this approach?

Children are motivated to be contestants against each other in some cultures. Personally, I believe that it fosters them to become

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and in some cases be demotivated.

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essay will discuss my point of view in the following paragraphs, including some examples from my own experience. One of the main disadvantages of motivating youngsters to compete is creating a sense of

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adolescents. Those who are sensitive to being

first,

in no circumstance do adopt

others

' success. To exemplify, one of the most outstanding psychologists, Sigmund Freud claims that the main source of

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in early-aged school-goers is confrontation

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student with another.

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, another concern is that

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confrontation causes

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of motivation.

In other words

, by exposing competition with coevals to be

first,

adolescents could lose their self-confidence

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is an essential point of courage deficiency.

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, studies show that people who are successful in their field, are the ones

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their ways solely for their own thoughts and desire,

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others

who are exposed to tackle with being first had lost their self-esteem and live just for

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the sake

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of getting ahead

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of others

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.

On the other hand

, turning to the positives, being

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encouraged

can ease learning procedure, in some cases, as if is beneficial especially, in group

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. In

team work

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, children are interested not only be prosperous

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but

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find new ways to learn. In a nutshell, compared to the above-discussed advantages,

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, there seem to be more benefits of

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move away in search of knowledge. Both parents and teachers should keep a balance when

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children to compete with

others

.