The diagrams below show the existing ground floor plan of a house and a proposed plan for some building work.

The diagrams below show the existing ground floor plan of a house and a proposed plan for some building work.
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The two pictures compare the current layout of the ground
floor
of a house with a plan to redesign the same living space. We can see that the new design proposal involves making a number of changes to the ground
floor
of the house, mainly in the central
hall
area. There are no plans to change the external walls and entrances. The most significant change from the existing to the proposed
floor
plan is that there will no longer be a separate
hall
when the building work has been completed.
This
will be achieved by the removal of the internal wall on the living
room
side and the redesign of the stairs. Without the separate
hall
area, the living
room
space will be larger and contains the staircase to the first
floor
. To replace the current straight staircase, a new set of winding stairs will be installed in the corner of the living
room
. The internal door between the
hall
and the kitchen will be replaced by a set of double doors connecting the kitchen to the new living
room
.
Lastly
, the planned building work will
also
include the installation of some kitchen furniture.
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