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More and more business meetings are taking place online. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this trend? (reported 2021, 2022, 2023)

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In the modern world, an increasing number of
business
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 tend to do online
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online
meetings
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 a lot of benefits for many businesses.
However
,
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doing
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, could contribute
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 many demerits as well.
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 essay argues strongly in favour of the former position, and in the following paragraphs, both of these views will be discussed in detail before the conclusion is reached. On the one hand, it is certainly true that
people
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relationship
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 are reduced by Internet
meetings
.
This
 is because working at home is making
people
 to less
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communicate
 each other.
As a result
,online
meeting
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 can reduce
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relationship
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.
Nevertheless
, it cannot be denied that social
meetings
 are making businesses a lot more
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profits
.
This
 is particularly because businesses can save the
cost
 of energy bills and
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. To illustrate
this
 point,
according to
 a recent research study by Harvard University,
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approximately
 30% of
business
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 in the US since COVID are saved their
cost
 by working from home.
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,
the
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online
meetings
 help many
business
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 to reduce the
cost
 of
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 energy. In conclusion,
although
 online
meeting
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 can reduce
people
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relationship
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, help many
business
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 to reduce the
cost
 of
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usage
 energy.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • convenience
  • cost-saving
  • time-saving
  • increased participation
  • flexibility
  • technical difficulties
  • lack of personal connection
  • distractions
  • limited interaction
  • language barriers
  • cultural differences
  • connectivity issues
  • audio/video problems
  • disrupt the flow
  • building rapport
  • non-verbal cues
  • reduced focus
  • spontaneous interaction
  • exchange of ideas
  • collaboration
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