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The graph shows the amount of money spennt on books in Germany , France , Italy and Austria between 1995 and 2005.

The graph shows the amount of money spennt on books in Germany , France , Italy and Austria between 1995 and 2005.
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The graph represents the expenditure in US
dollars
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 on
books
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 in
four
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countries
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 from 1995 to 2005.
Overall
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, spending levels in all of the
four
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countries
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 show an increasing trend, but Germany leading in terms of the amount of money spent on
books
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.
To begin
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 with, Germany allocated 80
million
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 US
dollars
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 to book purchases in 1995. The figure rose to 90
million
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 in 1999 but experienced a slight drop to approximately 85 in 2003. By 2005, Germans spent over 90
million
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 US
dollars
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 on
books
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, accounting for the highest number among the
four
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countries
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. In 1995, France and Italy spent 55
million
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 and 50
million
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 US
dollars
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, respectively.
In contrast
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, Italy's spending declined in Italy, to 50
million
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, in 1999, but
then
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 steadily increased to just above 60 by the end of the period. Austria spent only 30 US
million
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dollars
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 in 1995, accounting for the lowest expenditure in
this
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 year among the
four
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countries
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 that year.
However
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, there was a significant upward trend in spending on
books
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, reaching above 70 by the end of 2005, surpassing Italy's in the same year.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words dollars, books, four, countries, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • expenditure
  • trend
  • increase
  • decrease
  • peak
  • surge
  • decline
  • fluctuate
  • steady
  • comparison
  • significant change
  • spending patterns
  • economic conditions
  • cultural factors
  • cross-country comparison
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