The pie charts show the average household expenditures in Japan and Malaysia in the year 2010.

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The charts illustrate the proportion of spending on different goods and services of households in two different countries in 2010.

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it is clear that

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householders in both countries spent the largest proportion of their income on Housing and Hood,

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Healthcare was the service receiving the lowest share of expenditure. The proportion of spending on Housing was highest in Malaysia, at 34%

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Japanese families allocated just 21% of their budget for

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category. In terms of food, the figures for both nations were similar, at 24% and 27% for Malaysia and Japan respectively. Regarding the remaining categories, Transport accounted for exactly a fifth of total expenditure in Japan, twice as much as the figure for Malaysia. Healthcare received the least amount of money in the two countries

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the percentage of money spent on Other goods and services was quite significant, at over a quarter in each country.

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Lexical resource: 7.0

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Grammatical Range: 6.0

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Topic Vocabulary:

household expenditures
proportion
cultural differences
economic differences
living standards
real estate market
public transportation
private transportation
infrastructure
government healthcare policies
quality of life
holistic view
inflation
economic growth
societal norms
globalization
communication expenses
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The pie charts show the average household expenditures in Japan and Malaysia in the year 2010.

Many people go through life doing work that they hate or have no talent for. Why does this happen? What are the consequences of this situation? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

More and more information about the lives of celebrities is found in newspapers, magazines, and online. Why is this happening? What are the disadvantages for the reading public?

As well as making money, businesses also have social resonsibilities, To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Fatherhood ought to be emphasized as much as motherhood

Some species of animals are almost extinct; and many others seem to be fast approaching a similar risk. What are the reasons for this? What should be done to solve this problem? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge and experience.