The Graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018 Summaries the information by selectin and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The number of
shop
closed and opened between 2011-2018 from the graph.From the beginning Change to a plural noun
shops
closures
shop
has higher numbers
than openings
shop
around 1 thousand apart and decreased a bit each years
. The Change to a singular noun
year
numbers
of both closures
and openings
shop
are
decreased the most in 2015 but the Unnecessary verb
apply
numbers
of closures
shop
are
quickly recovered in the next year but Unnecessary verb
apply
openings
shop
’s line is continuously gone down on
the next year. Another big Change preposition
in
different
between Replace the word
difference
closures
Correct article usage
the closures
shop
and openings
Correct article usage
the openings
shop
is closures
shop
numbers
has
Correct subject-verb agreement
have
very
least decline compared to Correct article usage
the very
openings
Correct article usage
the openings
shop
from the base information on graph
. In 2018 they ended up with Add an article
a graph
the graph
closures
shop
’s number 1 thousand higher than openings
Correct article usage
the openings
shop
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