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The Graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018 Summaries the information by selectin and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The Graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018 Summaries the information by selectin and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The number of
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shop
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shops
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 closed and opened between 2011-2018 from the graph.From the beginning
closures
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shop
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 has higher
numbers
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 than
openings
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shop
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 around 1 thousand apart and decreased a bit each
years
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year
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. The
numbers
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 of both
closures
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 and
openings
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shop
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are
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decreased the most in 2015 but the
numbers
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 of
closures
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shop
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are
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quickly recovered in the next year but
openings
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shop
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’s line is continuously gone down
on
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 the next year. Another big
different
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 between
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closures
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the closures
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shop
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 and
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openings
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the openings
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shop
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 is
closures
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shop
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numbers
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has
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have
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very
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the very
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 least decline compared to
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openings
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the openings
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shop
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 from the base information on
graph
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a graph
the graph
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. In 2018 they ended up with
closures
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shop
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’s number 1 thousand higher than
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openings
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the openings
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shop
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words shop, closures, numbers, openings with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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