The Graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018 Summaries the information by selectin and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The Graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018 

Summaries the information by selectin and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The number of
shop
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shops
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closed and opened between 2011-2018 from the graph.From the beginning
closures
shop
has higher
numbers
than
openings
shop
around 1 thousand apart and decreased a bit each
years
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year
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. The
numbers
of both
closures
and
openings
shop
are
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decreased the most in 2015 but the
numbers
of
closures
shop
are
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quickly recovered in the next year but
openings
shop
’s line is continuously gone down
on
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in
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the next year. Another big
different
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between
closures
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the closures
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shop
and
openings
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the openings
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shop
is
closures
shop
numbers
has
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have
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very
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the very
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least decline compared to
openings
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the openings
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shop
from the base information on
graph
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a graph
the graph
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. In 2018 they ended up with
closures
shop
’s number 1 thousand higher than
openings
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the openings
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shop
.
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