the chart below shows the proportion of british students at one university in england

the chart below shows the proportion of british students at one university in england
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illustrates
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the
precentages
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percentages
percentage
of British
students
at one university in England who were manage to communicate
other
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languages
additionally
English, in
years
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2000 and 2010.
Overall
, comparing both charts speaking ability of Spanish, two other
languages
and
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languages
were
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higher in 2010 than
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,
while
German
, French and no other
languages
were lower. In 2000, 30% of British
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were
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to speak Spanish and it was the highest value
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the other
languages
.
Secondly
, 20% of
students
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could not communicate
any
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with any
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other
language
speakers viewed 15%.
Finally
,
German
speakers and two other
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speakers revealed 10%. In 2010, except
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language
communication, 5% growth expressed
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5 sectors
such
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,
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French, Spanish, another
language
, two other
languages
and no other
language
.
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,
German
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talent of British
students
in addition
to English in 2010
as
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same
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as
2000
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.
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