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People are more mobile nowadays. They seldom live in one city all of their lives. Why do you think this is happening? What are the consequences of this trend? Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of this situation. Provide specific reasons and examples to support your opinion

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that nowadays people are more mobile in their lifestyle. It becomes more popular to live in different cities rather than just live in one all
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 the entire
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. In my personal opinion, there are advantages and disadvantages
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 situation. Let's review some of them.
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, I tend to think that
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 in various locations can influence
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our mentality and intelligence. It can increase our level of
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common knowledge and make us more open-minded persons. It is
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 a great opportunity to research the world we live in. You can see on your own more
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, it brings a huge impact on our attitude towards others and can potentially improve our
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 in general.
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, two of my friends moved to Poland when they were students
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 they decided to try exploring new countries to get a better level of
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, more impressions and some new
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 in their lives. They decided to do it permanently. I respect their bravery.
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, not for
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this
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 experience can be positive and
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. There are some people who prefer
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 living style and choose not to be mobile at all. I understand
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 point of view, because it can be
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 to move to another city or even a country. Not everybody can deal with
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 changes. It is important to listen to your brain and soul. If you feel it's something
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 it is completely normal to stay
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one location.
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, I want to say that each of us should make their own choice to be mobile or not. Because
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development and growth
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 make things hard and worse. So it is always up to every person what to choose to feel comfortable and calm.

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task response
Add a clear plan before you write. Start with a short view about the trend, then give two or three reasons, then the effects, and end with a clear ending.
content
Give more detail for each idea. Use one or two real or likely facts to back each point.
grammar
Fix errors in spelling and form. Use simple, correct words and check spellings.
coherence
Use linking words to join ideas smoothly, like 'first', 'also', 'however', 'as a result'.
task
The essay shows an opinion on the topic.
content
There is an example from life to support a point.
structure
There is a conclusion that restates view.
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