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People are more mobile nowadays. They seldom live in one city all of their lives. Why do you think this is happening? What are the consequences of this trend? Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of this situation. Provide specific reasons and examples to support your opinion

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In our days people use
there
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their
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 phones and computers quite
regulary
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regularly
 for their work. It means that they can spend time more freely as it was before. From
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this
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this,
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 you can build up a great
life style
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lifestyle
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 which will give you a
lot
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lot of
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 advantages.
For example
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such
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 as: traveling, working during
the
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light sickness, comfortable
enviroment
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environment
 etc.
This
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 mobility can
fullfil
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fulfil
 your dreams and make you
social
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a social
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 human being.
However
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,
such
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 people can face
with
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the other side of it.
Consequences
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 of
such
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 living can lead to more financial
expences
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expenses
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 which would cause
the
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problem
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problems
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 in the future. Sometimes spending more money
for
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on
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the
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apply
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rent and moving from one city to another can be very
pricy
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expensive
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.
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Also
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 you won't be able to see your family and your closest
frieds
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friends
freaqunty
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frequency
.
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 things can lead to
the
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apply
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depression and burnout at
you
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your
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 work. As for my personal
opinion
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opinion,
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 it is better to stay
at
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in
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 your home town and be able to travel around the world or your motherland. I don't like the idea
to move
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of moving
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 to another city as I
am feeling
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feel
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 that it is great for living and building my future here. It's great when you have
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a friend
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friend
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friends
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 around the country and sometimes you can spend
few
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a few
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 days in
there
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their
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 city but not for
a
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the
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 long
terms
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term
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.
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