The bar chart below describes some changes about the percentage of people were born in Australia and who were born outside Australia living in urban, rural and town between 1995 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 word

The bar chart below describes some changes about the percentage of people were born in Australia and who were born outside Australia living in urban, rural and town between 1995 and 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

You should write at least 150 word
The bar graph illustrates some differences
about
Change preposition
in
show examples
the percentage of humans born in
Australia
and those outside
Australia
(
cities
,
towns
and rural
areas
) in 1995 and 2010.
Overall
,
Cities
have a higher count of
people
than rural
areas
or
towns
for both, population outside and in
Australia
. The second highest place after
cities
would be rural
areas
and
then
towns
. But that changes in 2010, as the city's population plummeted,
towns
Correct word choice
and towns
show examples
and rural
areas
have lesser and lesser
people
born. In 1995,
cities
had a greater amount of
people
being born. Not many
people
were born in
towns
while
rural
areas
still had a considerable amount of
people
birthing there. But compared to
people
born in
Australia
,
people
born outside
Australia
were born more in rural
areas
. The popularity of
people
being born in
towns
lessened when the focus shifts to
people
born outside
Australia
. For the record of 2010, the rate of
people
born in
Australia
and outside was high in
cities
.
Nevertheless
,
people
born outside
Australia
had a higher number (20 more compared to 1995) of
people
being born in
cities
. The trend of children being born in
towns
and rural
areas
lessens in 2010.
People
living outside
Australia
, giving birth in rural
areas
almost becomes negligent. An extreme drop compared to the graph of 1995.
Submitted by revatidave1503 on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Vocabulary: Replace the words australia, cities, towns, areas, people with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.

Essentional vocabulary list for IELTS Writing 7+

Learn how to write high-scoring essays with powerful words.
Download Free PDF and start improving you writing skills today!
What to do next:
Look at other essays: