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The graph below shows different sources of air pollutants in the UK from 1990 to 2005. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words. (20 mins.)

The graph below shows different sources of air pollutants in the UK from 1990 to 2005. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words. (20 mins.)
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The line graph illustrates the total number of major causes of
the
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air
 contamination in
UK
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the UK
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during
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 1990 to 2005. The main sources of
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pollution
 are categorized into three groups which are transport, industry,
households
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and households
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.
Overall
,
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air
pollution
was
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continued to
declined
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decline
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overtime
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over time
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 at an approximately constant rate. The
pollution
 from industry was the main contributor to
reduce
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reducing
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the
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air
pollution
.
while
 the contamination from
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 2 sources was almost stable. More than 70
percent
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per cent
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 of the
air
pollution
 in the UK came from the industry which had the largest amount at almost 6
million
tonnes
 in 1990
,
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 and continued to drop significantly
at
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 5
million
tonnes
 in 1993 to 3
million
tonnes
 in 1996.
Additionally
,
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air
pollution
 from transportation remained stable at approximately 1
million
tonnes
.
On the other hand
, the contamination from
household
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households
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 maintained the same level between 1990 and 1993.
However
, it
was
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sharply declined
at
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in
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 1996 and continued to decline to almost 0
million
tonnes
at
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in
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 2005.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words air, pollution, million, tonnes with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "declined" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stable" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Emissions
  • Air quality
  • Pollutants
  • Contributing factors
  • Industrial processes
  • Transport sector
  • Household energy
  • Agricultural activities
  • Percentage change
  • Decade
  • Reduction
  • Increase
  • Significantly
  • Fluctuations
  • Trends
  • Sustainable practices
  • Environmental policy
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