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The graph below shows different sources of air pollutants in the UK from 1990 to 2005. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words. (20 mins.)

The graph below shows different sources of air pollutants in the UK from 1990 to 2005. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words. (20 mins.)
#sources #air #pollutants #uk #summaries #information #features #comparisons #mins
The line displays
the
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information
of
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about
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 where
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air
pollution
 is from in
UK
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the UK
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 between 1990 to 2005. There are 3 sources
which
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picked to show in the picture; transportation, industry and households.
Overall
, the total amount of
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air
pollution
 is decreased every year. It can be seen in the graph that
the
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in the
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year
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of
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1990 to 1999, and 2002 to 2005, the graph constantly went down
whereas
 it slightly declined
in
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from
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 1999 to 2002. Even though the
overall
of
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air
pollution
 was reduced
but
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the
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transportation was
in
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the opposite way. In the picture, there is almost the same
during
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from
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 1996 to 1999
while
 the other periods were increased. The
air
pollution
 from the industrial section was
significant
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 down in every year.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "overall".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words air, pollution with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Emissions
  • Air quality
  • Pollutants
  • Contributing factors
  • Industrial processes
  • Transport sector
  • Household energy
  • Agricultural activities
  • Percentage change
  • Decade
  • Reduction
  • Increase
  • Significantly
  • Fluctuations
  • Trends
  • Sustainable practices
  • Environmental policy
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