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You work at home and have a problem with a piece of equipment that you use for your job.

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I hope
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 letter finds you in health and
the
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 best of
spirit
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. I am writing
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 letter with the crucial purpose of
asking
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 apply you to extend the rent of my house for some time. I have some financial obstacles. Because my mother is sick, I need money for medicine.And since there are several utility problems in
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 house, I want to eliminate them.
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, the faucet of the Artizon is not working well and water is dripping from the water pipes, and the neighbours are complaining about it.Admittedly
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 month, I couldn't go to work for a
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 to take care of my mother, and
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 affects my salary.Because my mother had an injury on her leg.He could not
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to move
 apply. So for some reason, I tried to extend the rent. I hope you will not ignore these problems and help me.
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