Some people view teenage conflict with their parents as a necessary part of growing up, whilst others see it as something negative which should be avoided. Discuss both view and give your own opinion.

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Nowadays, there are two different opinions, that to grow up children,
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important to have
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others believe that it affects negatively
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the relations between parents and
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teenagers
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, I agree with neither one or the
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. I believe that with some children you need to be strict, but with
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you need to teach them
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the right way.
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,
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clear that children, who develop with difficult
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stronger and to overcome every obstacle in their lives,
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about their
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. For Evidence, I know
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famous football player Luka Modric, who plays
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Real Madrid and has
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successful career
, but
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childhood was very hard
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because he had
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up without his parents during the war in Croatia.
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that, he managed to become a successful and famous person, who
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football player in World Cup in 2018.
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, I believe that there are still many families, that learn their youngsters without violence and give them
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correct advice
and support them during their development. That gives them more
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confidence
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freedom
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as Tom Cruise, who is
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makes him one of the
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actors
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Hollywood. In
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case,
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young people the right advice or to let them choose what is better for them. In conclusion, there is no need for much pressure on
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teenagers
or much freedom in their decisions. They want good advice and guidance throughout their volunteer life.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • autonomy
  • individuality
  • emotional intelligence
  • conflict resolution skills
  • persistent
  • unresolved
  • communication gaps
  • rebellious behavior
  • substance abuse
  • mental health issues
  • critical skills
  • deeper understanding
  • family dynamics
  • quest for independence
  • crucial for adulthood
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