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Working from home has become more common with technological advances; however, it has many challenges associated with it. What are some of the challenges that someone working from home may face? What some of the influences on society of more people work from home? What is your opinion?

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Currently,
due to
 the advance of technology, the number of
people
 working from
home
 has been increasing, which has brought many challenges for those who work from their house.
In addition
,
this
 trend is causing
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 consequences
on
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 society.
People
 who are working from
home
is
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 facing many issues to deal with
this
 new situation. For instance, it has
reported
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 that
people
 are working many hours more per day than when they were in the office. As they do not need to go
home
 anymore, they
ended
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 up working more, including during the weekends. Another problem is dealing with personal issues
such
 as households and children.
For example
, for those who have kids can be difficult to
foccus
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focus
 on their work activities at the same time that they need to look after the little ones.
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 the problems related above, the tendency
of working
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 from
home
 can
cause
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 several impacts on
the
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society,
such
 as a decrease in the economy and
helth
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health
 problems in the population. Once
people
 do not
to
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go outside to work they will not need to eat in the street and,
consequently
, the restaurants will have less profit.
Furthermore
,
people
 will not need to buy new clothes and accessories, which will lead to a fall in
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consumption. Another problem
mightl
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might
 be the reduction of social
contac
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contact
contacts
, which may cause loneliness and depression.
As a
result
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 the
amout
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amount
 of
people
 with health problems will soar. All these facts considered, in my opinion, the rise of working from
home
 is not a positive thing either for
people
neither
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 for
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society.
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