The average age for individuals to give birth is increasing. Some people think that it will have negative impact on family and country. What is your opinion about this?

Some people think that becoming a parent at a particular time has increased these days which may be the cause not only to the family but
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to the country. I support the viewpoint as
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aspect can lead to some financial and overpopulation concerns. It is often seen that when a couple decides to become a parent and raise a family after having children, more responsibilities and
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has to be faced by themselves.
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, from nurturing a baby to a young age, from kindergarten to college study, parents experience each and every moment normally until it turns into a financial and mental burden.
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, thriving sometimes increases stress which can be a major issue in society.
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, anxiety and stress are the basic health issues which stem from parenting than other social issues.
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, if
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generation follows
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trend in the long run, it
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be a national concern for countries. Overpopulation, as an example, is widely depreciated by the government because it would be more difficult to improve the health system and infrastructure for individuals. The medical and education sector is improving,
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, more patients and unemployment issues are
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increasing.
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, people and authorities face problems
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inadequate control of parenting. In conclusion, having children at an early age is not a major concern until people are mentally and financially prepared, which
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no harm to society and the country.

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Make sure to clearly state your opinion in the introduction. It will help guide your reader.
coherence
Ensure that your paragraphs have a clear main idea and flow smoothly from one to the next.
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Provide more specific examples to strengthen your points, this will make your argument more convincing.
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You have a clear understanding of the topic, and your opinion is expressed throughout the essay.
coherence
Your essay covers both sides of the argument, which shows critical thinking.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

Topic Vocabulary:
  • average age
  • give birth
  • increasing
  • negative impact
  • advantages
  • challenges
  • effects
  • family
  • country
  • older parents
  • financial stability
  • maturity
  • life experience
  • health risks
  • parenting skills
  • intergenerational relationships
  • future generations
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