Some people think that girls should take husband’s name after marriage while others feel that they should not follow this age old tradition. What is your opinion?

It is a highly
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debatable
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that woman should replace their
last
name
after their wedding.
While
others believe that they should not change their surname even
they
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are married.
According to
my opinion, it is
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choice.
Although
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, in some
countries
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countries,
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it is necessary to change their
name
.
To begin
with,
Some
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culture
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cultures
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and
tradition
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traditions
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bride
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brides
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have to choose
hushbund
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the hushbund
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;
s
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's
family
name
as their family
name
eventually, it is part of
ritual
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the ritual
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.
For instance
, in Indian customs girls have to shift their
last
ame
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name
as
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to
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their partner's
name
.
Moreover
,
sometime
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this
process is
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by law in some countries. To
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, in Britain, to lease a house, it must be
similar
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a similar
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last
name
for both
hushbund
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husband
and wife. For that reason, many international
worker
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workers
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find difficulties
to find
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in finding
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accomodation
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accommodation
.
On the other hand
, nowadays many
feminist
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against
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this
notion. They
belives
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that girls should not
loose
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their identity by changing their names.
Also
, they argue that
,
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it reflects their heritage, especially
represent
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representing
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their
genrations
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generations
generation
.
Furthermore
, many people decide to stick with their full
name
though, they add their
common law
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partner's
name
in it as well. One
of
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the
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example is well-known actress Kareena
kapoor
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khan, as she
decide
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to add her groom's
last
name
in
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the very end of her full
name
. To summarize, I opine that,
wheather
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whether
changing their full
name
or
keeps
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keeping it
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as it was before their
marraige
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marriage
is
girl's
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the girl's
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choice.
However
, to keep alive our traditional values, they should understand the value of their culture
while
they are making their decision.
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