Question is The chart below shows the percentage of households owned and rented accommodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011.

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The chart below shows the percentage of households owned and rented accommodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011.
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The column chart gives information about the people who have owned lodging in comparison with rentals in England and Wales Varane from 1918 to 2011.
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, with the exception of the year 2011 for two categories, the
figure
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for
households
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in rental
accommodation
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saw a gradual drop,
while
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the number of
households
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in owned
accommodation
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was rising gradually. In 1917, the
figure
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for ownership was the lowest percentage nearly 25% among these years.
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, that of
rentals
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the rentals
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category was the highest (nearly 78%). From
this
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year to 2001, the
figure
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for
households
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in owned
accommodation
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saw a rise of approximately 46%,
while
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the proportion of
households
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in rental
accommodation
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dropped by nearly 45% during
this
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period. It is worth noting that in 1971, the
figure
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for ownership was equal to that
of
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for
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rentals. In 2011, unlike previous years, the number of people who had owned lodging saw a minimal decrease,
whereas
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the
figure
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of people who had rented lodging rose by nearly 4%.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words figure, households, accommodation with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 5 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "gradual" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • ownership
  • tenancy
  • trend
  • fluctuation
  • proportion
  • residence
  • dwelling
  • shift
  • transition
  • migration
  • fluctuate
  • stabilize
  • rise
  • fall
  • increase
  • decrease
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