Mrs Barrett, an English-speaking woman who lives in your town, has advertised for someone to help her in her home for a few hours a day next summer. - suggest how you could help her in her home - say why you would like to do this work - explain when you will and will not be available

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Dear Mrs Barrett, Hello. My name is Lee as your neighbour who moved to next your house three weeks ago. I am writing

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letter to inform my interest about posted your advertisement on The Vancouver Website a month ago,

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I want to let you know about me. I have been working at a hospital for over 10 years as a doctor. I saw you are suffering from your legs and that you have a disease. I totally know how to treat a patient during someone has a symptom and feels bad. And

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, I am good at cooking in other countries' versions like Western, Korean, and East Asia styles. The reason why I want to help you next summer,is I have a lot of time to spend with you

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not having a job now. And another reason is that I have to take time to help people as a mandatory work for

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a job as a doctor. I am available to help you from 12 pm to 6 pm every day except for Sunday. I hope I receive a good reply from you as soon as possible. Sincerely, Lee

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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

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‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 7.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

9 paragraphs

194 words

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Mrs Barrett, an English-speaking woman who lives in your town, has advertised for someone to help her in her home for a few hours a day next summer. - suggest how you could help her in her home - say why you would like to do this work - explain when you will and will not be available

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

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