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Writing Task 2: You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Why don’t people take environmental issues seriously in spite of being given many warning by scientists? Why don’t people save energy in their daily life? Discuss the possible causes of these phenomena and give possible solutions. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should write at least 250 words

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The fact that these days, inhabitants do not take the negative issues of the
environment
 seriously and save energy in their daily life in spite
of
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being given many cautionary by scientists is becoming more widespread in many parts of the world.
This
 essay will examine the causes and various solutions that could be taken to improve the situation. There are a variety of different causes for
this
 matter.
To begin
 with, many scientists have found many bad
sign
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 from
environment
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the environment
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 like extreme weather
such
 as
hurricane
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hurricanes
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,
tornado
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tornados
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 or
tsunami
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tsunamis
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.
While
that
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some
people
 think that the future is for the future so they just live comfortably in the present without worrying about the
environment
 being seriously damaged. Another contributing factor to mention is that
people
 who
less
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 interest in
environment
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the environment
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does
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do
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 not have
an a
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 awareness to protect the
environment
 because of less
information
 about it from
media
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the media
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 or the government. The
information
 is often shared on social
network
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networks
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 rather than on television,
it
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 makes difficult for older
people
 or
people
 who do not use social
network
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networks
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 to access
such
information
, how it has a serious effect on our daily lives and what can we do to minimize environmental harm.
For example
, electricity is used wastefully and lack of electricity
are
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become
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 a big problem in our lives. Despite these circumstances, there are several solutions that
goverments
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governments
government
 and residents could take to solve the problems. The
goverments
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governments
government
and media can make
a
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 environmentally sound and it
need
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 to be said on all the platforms like
on
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the
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television, Facebook, TikTok,
Instagram
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and Instagram
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,… so the
information
 will
accessible
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 to all ages.
For example
, the public advertisement can display how
people
 can save
electric
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 or water in their daily lives. In conclusion, the problem of
environment
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 is unlikely to be entirely eliminated in the short term.
However
, various solutions can be taken to tackle the issue to reduce the effects.
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