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What are some of the factors in modern society that causes stress for young professionals and how we can reduce it?

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Many factors that cause
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 for young professional in modern society is becoming more widespread in many countries.
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 essay will examine the causes
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stress
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as well as
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 the effects related to
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 problem. There are a variety of different factors which
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stress
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 of
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 phenomenon.
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 with, young professionals often face heavy workloads and pressure to perform
professional
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 employers and themselves, leading to burnout. To address
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, set goals in priorities and learn to practice time management techniques, communicate openly with supervisors about workload, and delegate tasks when possible. Another significant to mention is that financial pressures
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 housing
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, credit cards and loans can create
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as
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 young professionals who
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 lacking
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experiences
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experience
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 in saving
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funds
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 for emergency
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situations
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. To reduce it, make a long-term financial that aligns with their saving goals and create an emergency budget which is cover over 6 months of living
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.
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 safety net can help alleviate financial
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 during unexpected situations.
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