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Many countries today are expecting high level of migration from rural area to cities what are the causes of this trend, and what effects does it have on the existing city dwellers?

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Considering the
increase
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 in industrialization among countries.
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, the population is moving from
countryside
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the countryside
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 towards
cities
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.
People
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 migrate to find not only better work opportunities but
also
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 better education opportunities.
This
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migration
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have
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 some negative impacts on
urban
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the urban
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 resident. They not only suffer from high
traffic
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 congestion but
also
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 face an
increase
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 in rental charges. In general, one of the major causes of
migration
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 of
people
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 from rural areas towards
cities
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 is employment. Mainly the majority of industries are located near
cities
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, so employment opportunities in
cities
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 are relatively higher compared to rural areas.
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, the government
also
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 make economic zones near the main
cities
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 to attract foreign investor in starting an industry in these economic zones.
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, the Gwadar Economic Zone is created by the government of Pakistan to attract Chinese investors.
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, another major cause of
this
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migration
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 is the quality of education.
Top ranked
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 educational institutes have their campuses in the city center.
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, the quality of education in
cities
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 is better in comparison to
sub-urban
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suburban
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 and rural areas.
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,
Top
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the Top
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 15 educational institutes in Pakistan are located in
big
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the big
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cities
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 of Karachi, Lahore and Islamabad.
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, several consequences of
this
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migration
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 are faced by
urbanite
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urbanites
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. One of the main impacts they face is the
traffic
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pile up
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.
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, as the masses start relocating from rural
region
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regions
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 towards metropolitan.
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, we observe a significant
increase
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 in
number
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a number
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 of automobiles causing
traffic
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blockage
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blockages
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 at various locations.
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, daily
traffic
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 jams in Litton Road, Rome caused
people
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 to take longer
route
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routes
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 from the Rex Highway. Another challenge that the civic
resident
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residents
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 encounter is the
increase
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 in
property’s
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property
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 rental rates.
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 is
due to
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 the fact that demand
of
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 renting residential and commercial property increases.
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, brokers utilize
this
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 opportunity to sub-let the property to different
people
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.
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, rental rates in the city of Karachi has been doubled compared to
last
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 year.
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, the search
of
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for
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 better career positions and learning options
have
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has
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 resulted in
huge
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a huge
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 shift
of
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in
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 population from villages to cosmopolitan
centers
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centres
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.
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,
this
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 leads to an
increase
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 in challenges faced by the town residents.
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