Some people like to try new things, for example, places to visit and types of food. Other people prefer to keep doing things they are familiar with. Discuss both these attitudes and give your own opinion.

What do
people
like to do? Every
people
have
different
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kind of enjoyment. On the
one
hand, Some of them are
doing
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visiting new places,
try
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and try
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to
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new types
fo
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of
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food
on the other hand
others do not like them. They prefer to sit our home or
do
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not leave their
contry
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country
and do not wonder
different
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things
. today we will discuss these groups
behavior
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.
Firstly
, I want to talk about
people
who love visiting
of
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different places and try to different
things
. They are
kind
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the kind
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of
people
who are loving adventures.
According to
these
people
, life is short and
that is
why if you have an
oppurtinities
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opportunities
you should
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our world. At the same time, it
need
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to require for
own
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its own
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general culture. it is very important for them
that is
learning different
culture
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cultures
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, cuisine, life and geographics.
Secondly
, other groups who are not want to know different
things
.
For
instance
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they do not go
another
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to another
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city
another
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or another
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country and even do not
explorer
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different
culture
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cultures
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. because They feel happy
their
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in their
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region,city, village etc.
themselves
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.
That is
why they seem
it
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unnecessary.  In conclusion,
happy
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is changing
person
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from person
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to person. Somebody can love to travel and they can be happy
this
that.
Another
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people
do not like
this
.
These kind
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of
people
are
seperated
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separated
between reformer and traditionalism by the society. I do not
agree
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toagree
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this
opinion. Because somebody
do
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not love
for
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trying new
things
they
dont
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don't
called traditional or not. True happiness is what
one
feels, not what
one
sees or where
one
lives.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Novelty
  • Routine
  • Comfort zone
  • Risk-taker
  • Risk-averse
  • Enrichment
  • Personal growth
  • Innovation
  • Creativity
  • Stability
  • Tradition
  • Habit
  • Familiarity
  • Personal enrichment
  • Life stages
  • Fulfilling
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