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Some people believe that a good teamwork makes companies successful. Others say that it is more important for companies to have good leaders. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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 a part of the population believes that teamwork is the key to success in companies , another part believes that the key is a good leader. In
this
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 essay , I will discuss both sides and
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 I will give my opinion. On the one hand, some people believe that teamwork is the most important aspect of a company's success. They consider that if a team is united and the members work complementary, the results are better than if they have had a leader. Those individuals like the idea of all workers being equal not only because in that way the relationships of the company will get stronger ,but
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 because the vibe will be more relaxed .
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, if in a Bank all workers are equal, they will work together to grow the association.
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, some individuals believe that a leader is the one who influences the company's success the most. They think that the director is the person who analyses hard situations, measures every employee's qualities
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as
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takes
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makes
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hard decisions. With a person who represents a group, everyone is more confident and
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focuses
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 their attention only on what they have to do, without the pressure of
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 decisions. I agree with
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, if a store has a good director, the business will grow exponentially. In conclusion,I believe that even though teamwork is very important in a corporation , it is not the most important aspect of an association. I think that a good head is the most important key.

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task response
Ensure that you fully address the prompt given and provide a balanced discussion of both views. Also, present a clear opinion at the end of the essay.
coherence and cohesion
Work on the organization and coherence of your ideas. Use clear paragraph transitions and a structured essay format, including a clear introduction and conclusion.
lexical resource
Expand your vocabulary and use more varied and precise lexical resources. Avoid repetition and consider using synonyms or related terms to enhance your language.
grammatical range
Pay attention to your sentence structures and use a wider range of grammatical forms and sentence types. This will help to demonstrate greater control of the English language.
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