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Nowadays many people travel to foreign countries for pleasure. Some believe this travel has a negative impact on the countries travelled to. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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In
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 tend to visit other nations mainly for enjoyment.
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 gave rise to a contentious topic , argued by individuals claiming
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 tendency
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 a detrimental effect
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traveled
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 countries.
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 it's true that
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 visitors leave a positive impact on the countries they visit, it's difficult to underestimate the negative ones. On the one hand, the drawbacks remaining, especially for the cultural heritage of a specific nation after tourists, cannot be overlooked. The damage triggered by the physical interaction of foreigners with historical monuments, leaves enormously high repair costs for the local government, as structures of the past are old.
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, a high influx of
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 from abroad means excessive exploitation of cars with combustion engines.
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 indicates the contamination of the air in inner cities, leading to numerous health issues,
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 respiratory insufficiency, lung cancer, or cardiac ischemia.
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,
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 the other side, a great
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 from outside can contribute to the prosperity of local businesses, operating in the tourism industry.
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; hotels, restaurants, or even small shops will be able to increase their revenue by introducing their services creatively, and
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, tourists will shell out more.
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, the money spent by foreigners cycles back into the community, leading to an improvement in destitute
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's lives. In conclusion, ideologically, it seems that tourism comes with advantages,
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 as boosting the revenue of enterprises and giving a hand to increase life standards,
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 reality of the situation is more complex. The adverse impact is too big to be ignored, as future generations should be able to witness their
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 history.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Cultural exchanges
  • Global connections
  • Tourism boosts
  • Local economy
  • Over-tourism
  • Environmental degradation
  • Landmarks
  • Commodification of culture
  • Authentic cultural expressions
  • Cultural homogenization
  • Tourism infrastructure
  • Public services
  • Disrespect local customs
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