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eating sweet foods produces acid in the mouth, which can cause tooth decay. (high acid levels are measured by low ph values) describe the information below and discuss the implications for dental health.

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The
line
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 graph illustrates how three different sweet products affect the
PH
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level
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 in the
mouth
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 and how it changes in a range of time of 40
minutes
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. The three sweet foods studied were fruit
sugar
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,
Cane
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Sugar
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 and Honey.
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, it can be argued that
cane
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sugar
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 produces the highest increase of
acidity
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 inside the
mouth
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,
while
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 honey the less. The black dotted
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 outlines the
Ph
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level
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 at which tooth decay occurs which is equal to 5.5 Focusing on details, after 5
minutes
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 from the moment in which it has been eaten,
cane
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 carbohydrate causes a drop of
acidity
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 in the
mouth
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 that reaches the lowest peak of 3.5
ph
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level
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.
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, only after 30
minutes
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, the
ph
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level
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 overcomes the black dotted
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.
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, fruit
sugar
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 produces a lower augmentation in the
acidity
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 of the
mouth
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 compared with
sugar
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cane
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. As a matter of fact, after 5
minutes
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 from the ingestion the
acidity
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 decreases to a 4.5
ph
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level
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 and after 20
minutes
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 overcomes the black dotted
line
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.
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, honey produces the lowest
acidity
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 with a plummet at 5
pHs
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pH
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 after 5
minutes
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 from ingestion followed by a return over 5.5
pH
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 after a period included between 10 and 15
minutes
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.
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