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The table below shows information about age, average income per person and population below poverty line in three states in the USA. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below shows information about age, average income per person and population below poverty line in three states in the USA. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting and make comparisons where relevant.
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The table illustrates records related to age, average income per person and population below the poverty line in three distinct states in the USA. Units are measured in per cent and US
dollars
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.
Overall
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, the state with the highest number of seniors is Florida, which holds opposite
Utah
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.
Besides
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, California is the leader in average income per person,
along with
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 the highest ratio of poor population. Regarding age data,
Utah
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 took almost one-third of the under-18 group
while
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 the figure for C and F is
similarly
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 at around 16,5%.
In contrast
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, Florida accounted for 23% of the over-60 age group.
Utah
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,
on the other hand
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, only covers 8% of
this
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 record.
According to
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 the financial situation in the USA, the given states had a relatively equal average income. Particularly, residents in California could earn 23 000
dollars
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 on average, followed by people living in Florida (22 000
dollars
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) and
Utah
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 (17, 000
dollars
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).
However
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, the ratio of poor population in
Utah
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 was the lowest (9%)
while
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 that for California took up 16%.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 85%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words dollars, utah with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "ratio" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Comparative analysis
  • Metrics
  • Economic conditions
  • Cost of living
  • Percentage
  • Poverty line
  • Demographics
  • Workforce composition
  • Income disparity
  • Correlation
  • Economic health
  • Social-economic challenges
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