The Bar graph below shows the Expenditure in Million Pounds on fast food items by income groups in the UK in 1990.

The Bar graph below shows the Expenditure in Million Pounds on fast food items by income groups in the UK in 1990.
The bar graph below shows the Expenditure in
Million
Pounds
on fast
food
items by
income
groups in the UK in 1990.
Overall
,
hamburger
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the hamburger
a hamburger
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was the most popular
with
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among
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people
with high
income
and average
income
.
Whereas
,
people
with low
income
spent the most on fish and chips. For
the
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hamburger,
people
with high
income
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incomes
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spent more than 45
million
pounds
on
this
food
. Follow by
was
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were
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people
with
average
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an average
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income
spent about 30
million
pounds
on
this
food
.
In contrast
,
people
with low
income
only spent 15
million
pounds
to buy
hamburger
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hamburgers
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.
About
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Regarding
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fish and chips,
people
with
average
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an average
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income
spent 25
million
pounds
on
this
food
. Meanwhile,
people
with high and low
income
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incomes
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spent only 15
million
pounds
on fish and chips. With
the
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pizza,
people
with high
income
spent about 20
million
pounds
.
People
with average and low
income
only spent
a
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half and one third compared to
people
with high
income
respectively.
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