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One of the most pressing problems facing the world today is overpopulation. What policies do you think governments should adopt to address the causes and effects of this problem? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.*

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The modern
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 society is facing a plethora of problems, and overpopulation happens to be among the most common of them.
Although
 it is deemed to be a quite controversial topic, population control
policies
 are being commonly discussed on the political level and even adopted by some governments nowadays. To start off with the topic of these
policies
, some examples should be mentioned of the cases of their active usage in modern history,
such
 as China's infamous law on the number of children in a single household. Until recently,
Chinese
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 government used to tax families that willingly had more than one child. It allowed the country to bring its' extreme birth rates down for the economy to keep up with the number of
its'
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 existing population. The mentioned law,
however
, had recently been revised, becoming much less restrictive, and allowing families to comfortably afford having more children.
Although
 China was not the only country in modern history to directly restrict the means of reproduction, its' example has been mentioned actively in mass media, bringing up the questions of
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 of
such
policies
. Of course,
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humanity should come up with
counter measures
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 for overpopulation, but the dilemma of restricting life in order to survive seems way more complex than it might sound
initially
.
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 the countless examples of failed population control attempts made by the Russian government during the Soviet Union era. Among those were the attempts of secularizing the conservative religious communities around the Southern Caucasus in order to convince the people in that region to give up on the concept of having big extended families. To sum it up, overpopulation is indeed a serious threat
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 our civilization
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 current times.
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policies
 on controlling it should be introduced, those
policies
 should not be too restrictive on humans.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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