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Some people claim that not enough of the waste from homes is recycled. They say that the only way to increase recycling is for governments to make it a legal requirement.

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Nowadays, most developed countries encourage their citizens in the way of voluntarily to follow the tradition of bringing
waste
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 to recycle. Some
people
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 think that the
waste
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 from homes is not sufficient to recycle.
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, they consider that there is only one way to take care of increasing recycling, if governments make it a legal requirement. I think that the optimal variation to increase it
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 citizens would be provoked by the set up of
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 related to
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 sphere by governments.
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 the
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 accepted in the constitution by the
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 encourage
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 to increase the
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 that needs to recycle,
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 it will be mandatorily respected by them.
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 will understand that it makes them know that it is a responsibility to follow the
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 that are required by the
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 to take all the
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 to the recycle rather than
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leave it to their choices. After when the
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 decides to step
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forward by accepting important the
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 required to do sustainable it,
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, it will cause to improve the health of the environment. And it will originate a better healthy environment condition which will help to be treated from the diseases that
people
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 suffer from it. The first step when the
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 accept the
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 that
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 must follow if needed to increase the
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 of recycling,
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 after some moments
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 will be pushed by themselves to do it without thinking about the
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's
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 and continue to do it voluntarily.
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