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The line graph and pie chart below show information on crime in the UK for the last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The line graph and pie chart below show information on crime in the UK for the last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
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These two given graphs provide some information about various kinds of
crimes
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 that have happened throughout the previous year in the United Kingdom
besides
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 some data that are related to the frequency of criminal actions among individuals from dissimilar
age
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 groups.
Overall
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, most criminal activities have been done by young citizens in their youth.
Moreover
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,
the
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violent
crimes
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 were the most popular type of criminal commitment throughout
this
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 time frame.
According to
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 the line graph, people who were older than 8 years old have committed a
crime
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.
Furthermore
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, the
crime
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 rate that started after the
age
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 of 8 reached a peak of 80 at the
age
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 of 20 and
then
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 the rate of
crime
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 showed a downward trend at the
age
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 of 28 . based on data that can be observed after the
age
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 of 28,
It is clear that
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 older dwellers displayed a lower tendency to commit a
crime
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. Moving into the pie chart,
while
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 violent
crimes
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 occupied the first rank among these four types of
crime
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 at 46% and they were the most common
crime
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 in Britain over the mentioned time, public order
crimes
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 have been committed by a tiny minority of criminals.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words crimes, age, crime with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "graphs" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • The line graph depicts
  • The pie chart illustrates
  • reveals
  • displays
  • depicts
  • the trend of
  • the overall crime rate
  • steadily decreased
  • the distribution of
  • different types of crime
  • prevalent
  • accounts for
  • the most common crime
  • followed by
  • make up
  • a smaller proportion of
  • the total crimes
  • a smaller percentage
  • approximately
  • the remaining percentage
  • It is important to note that
  • reflects
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