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Nowadays, not enough students choose science subjects in university in many countries. What are the reasons for this problem? What are the effects on society?

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These days in most nations, few scholars opt for science courses in their future studies and
this
 can be a result of a lack of interest and the high cost of scientific courses, which has a negative effect on society as they will depend on other countries for answers to problems. In the world today, most individuals find it difficult to select experimental subjects because they lose focus, which can be
due to
 the environment in which they learn.
For example
, I have a personal experience during my secondary education, where I lost interest in most science subjects because I don't like my school and the lectures teaching those topics,
this
 made me only read to pass but not really know what science is all about. So one can continue with
such
 an attitude and totally lack the courage to
further
 these courses. Another reason is that
,
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 it is expensive,
due to
 the fact that it's involved practical aspects where one has to carry out experiments for better understanding, and the reagents are not cheap.
This
 could discourage an individual who finds it difficult to
further
 their education after high school,
hence
 they select careers that they can afford.
Furthermore
,
this
 trend will result in an independent society becoming dependent on other nations for solutions to their worries. For ,example most developing countries in Africa lack good research centres and scientists to carry out investigations on the origin of some diseases and cures, so they depend on the developed States with
such
 capacity to bring answers,
while
 they accept whatever that was given to them. So in
such
 ,cases if they have enough researchers and facilities, they won't rely on others and prevent delays before getting the work done. Conclusively, in some countries, loss of interest and financial retraining made fewer undergraduates go for scientific subjects, which may result in a society becoming vulnerable. It is necessary for the government to offer financial support to individuals who are interested in skill study and supervision at the high school level.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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