The table below shows the sales made by a coffee shop in an office building on a typical weekday.

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The table illustrates the sales of the

products

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by a

coffee

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shop in an office building on a particular weekday. Generally,

it is clear that

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the

products

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sold significantly were

coffee

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, pastries, and

sandwitch

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sandwich

sandwiches

. The

least

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last

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sold one was only tea. The most popular

times

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for selling

products

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were only at 7:30 - 10.30, 10:30 - 2.30, and 5.30 - 8.30.

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, there were the fewest selling time only at 2:30 - 5:30. During 7.30 - 10.30 pastries was the biggest selling

products

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than Sandwitch and tea, which sold five

times

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more than sandwitch and almost two

times

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more than tea. The same comparison is possible to make about

coffee

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at the same time.

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, during 5.30 - 8.30

coffee

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was the biggest consumption product of all other

products

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that were sold at the same time. Within 10.30 - 2.30 sandwiches witnessed the most sold product than others,

however

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this

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product was sold 4-5

times

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less at other

times

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".

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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words products, coffee, times with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.

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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.

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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.

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4
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meeting the goal of 7 or more
3
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 7.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

159 words

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