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In many parts of the world, the pace of life was slower in the past than it is today. What do you think were the advantage and disadvantages of having slower pace of life?

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's habits and efforts, our society is much faster than before.  There are advantages and disadvantages aspects to the slow pace of
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 before. Should be said that there are many benefits of having a slow lifestyle before.
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 they are not in a rush like they are now. It relieves stress.
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, they spend more
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 with their family and friends, they are always together on holidays and various events.
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 don't argue about being a master of their craft or earning more money than others. Of course, they feel happy about it.
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, the slow pace of
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 has some disadvantages.
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 travel less because of their work. They spend a lot of
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 carrying around things like washing dishes and laundry.
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, they have less
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 for themselves.  teaches
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 that working well can change their lives. All in
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 I believe the slow way of
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 is better than our current
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 despite some disadvantages. they have a lot of free
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 but not always they don't take advantage of the free
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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