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The Bar graph below shows the Expenditure in Million Pounds on fast food items by income groups in the UK in 1990.

The Bar graph below shows the Expenditure in Million Pounds on fast food items by income groups in the UK in 1990.
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The Bargraph below illustrates the expenditure in
million
pounds
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of pounds
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 on fast food items by tom grap in the UK in 1990 (including
hamberger
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hamburger
, fish and chips,
pizza
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and pizza
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).
Overall
,
humberger
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hamburger
Schlumberger
 was the most popular
people
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among people
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 with high
income
 and
people
 with average
income
.
Whereas
, fish and chips
was
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were
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 the most bought
people
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by people
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 with low
income
. For the 2 dishes that
was
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were
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 most spent as
humberger
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hamburger
, the
people
 with high
income
 spent the most money on
this
 dish with more
45
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than 45
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million
pounds
 .Followed by the
people
 with average
income
. Spent about 35
million
pounds
 on
this
 dish.
In contrast
, the
people
 with low
income
was
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only spent 25
million
ounds
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pounds
rounds
for
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on
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humberger
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hamburger
 For fish and chips, the
people
 with average
income
 was the most spent 25
million
pounds
 on
this
 dish.
By
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At
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 the same time, the
people
 with high
income
 and the
people
 with low
income
was
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only spent 15
million
pounds
. For pizza, the
people
 with high
income
 spent about 20
million
pounds
, the
people
 with average
income
was
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only spent half of the number spent of the
people
 with high
Income
.
Mean
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Meanwhile
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while
,
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 the
people
 with low
income
was
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only spent about
one third
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one-third
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 of the number of the
people
 with average
income
.
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