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The mass media, including television, radio and newspapers, has great influence in shaping people's ideas and their minds.To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?Give reasons for your answer.

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Throughout the decades,
mass
media
such
 as television,
radio
 and newspaper, has been humanity's primary source of influence in shaping an individual's ideas and mind. I cannot stress how incredible of an impact
mass
media
 has brought us, especially with
radio
, so I completely agree with
this
 statement. For starters, to shape one's view, there must be a form of push to adopt and adapt, and
this
 is where we are prone to adopting an ideal, for that we tend to look to an outsider's perspective on the matter and come to our own conclusion; we look no
further
 than the daily
media
 outlet. The television,
radio
 and newspaper brief us on facts and ideas, for which we can utilize and shape our own minds;
for example
, revolutionary ideals can be formed through the words of the
media
, are you a communist? a socialist? or a fascist? Will the words of Lenin convince you or the opposer? the
media
 has been a playground that challenges our critical thinking and beliefs; none has been more prevalent than the
radio
. The
radio
 act as a loudspeaker to expand effects among the
mass
 audience. For multitudes of people,
radio
 was a primary source of information and entertainment in the second and third decades of the twentieth century. Radios fostered a real-time national conversation during the challenging times of the Depression and World War. For years, it is the greatest force (before television and the internet) in developing a
mass
 culture of sporting events like the Olympics, humorous programs like "Amos and Andy" and news all over the world. In conclusion, it is undeniably difficult to ignore the strong influences that the
media
 has given us, especially with
radio
. No matter how you perceive it, the
mass
media
 will always remain an essential part of shaping who we are and the way we view things.
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