The chart shows the percentage of households in owned and rented accommodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011

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The bar chart illustrates the percentage of owned and rented

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of the households in England and Wales from 1918 to 2011.

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, the trend of owning accommodation had increased over the years.

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, that of renting

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had decreased constantly. The percentages of both owning and renting are at the same rate in 1971. From 1918 to 1961, the percentage of owned

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started at 23

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, it continuously increased to 40

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in 1961.

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huge number, accounting for 77

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. Unfortunately, it decreased gradually to 59

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in 1961. Surprisingly, the percentages of both renting and owning accommodation were the same figure at 50

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in 1971. From 1981 to 2011, the percentage of owned accommodation increased extremely to 79

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, which is a peak point.

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, it slightly dropped to 64

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in 2011.

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, that of rented

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dropped dramatically, plunging to 31

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. Surprisingly, it rose

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slightly to 35

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in 2001.

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
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meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

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3 paragraphs

167 words

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