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The following chart shows the results of British survey taken in 2009 related to Housing preferences of UK people.

The following chart shows the results of British survey taken in 2009 related to Housing preferences of UK people.
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The bar chart illustrates the percentage of preferences in choosing
houses
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 of UK citizens in 3 different cities in the year 2009.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 apartments were the most popular choice in
Liverpool
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,
while
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 in London and
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Manchester
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,Manchester
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 people tended to live in semi-detached
houses
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. It is noticeable, Terraced
Houses
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 were the least common option
among
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in
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 cities. Looking at the chart for detail, one can see that nearly 60% of
Liverpool
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’s residents chose to live in flats, which was twice as much as that of London and three times as high as that of
Manchester
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.
By contrast
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, the opposite was true for Terraced
houses
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, the figure for the category in London was about 20%, followed by in
Liverpool
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 and
Manchester
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 at roughly 10%.
On the other hand
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, over a third of the result was recorded for Detached and Semi-detached
houses
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 in
Manchester
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,
while
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 around 15% was reported in
Liverpool
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. The proportions of Detached and Semi-detached
houses
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 were nearly 25% and approximately 35%, respectively, in
Liverpool
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.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words houses, liverpool, manchester with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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