The bar chart shows the percentage of adult male smokers in seven countries along with the world average in 2000 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The bar chart shows the percentage of adult male smokers in seven countries along with the world average in 2000 and 2015.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

Write at least 150 words.
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The bar chart illustrates the worldly
rate
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of smoking men between 2005 and 2015 , and presents a breakdown of their percentages in 7 different nations for the same period,
overall
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, the total
rate
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of men who smoke decreased and the percentages in 5 countries declined as well, but in two nations the rates increased obviously.
moreover
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, the Armenians have the highest percentage of male smokers in 2005 and the Australians have the lowest rates in both years. the global
rate
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decreased from about 42% in 2005 to around 33% in 2015.
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, in Lebanon and Egypt, the smoking percentage increased from around 35% in both countries in 2005 to 49% for the first and 44% for the latter. The percentages dropped in Armenia, Bangladesh, and Mexico to 51%, 39%, and 20% respectively in 2015,
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Cupa witnessed a slight decrease of only 1% from 2005 to the end of the given period.
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, Australia recorded the lowest rates in both years with 28% in 2005 and 18% in 2015. worth to notice that the majority of Armenian men in 2005 were smokers with 65% which is the highest recorded
rate
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through the given periods.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words rate with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 5 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • bar chart, percentage, adult male smokers
  • world average, increased, decreased
  • tobacco consumption, lung cancer
  • public health, awareness campaigns
  • government policy, smoking bans
  • health risks, nicotine, tobacco industry
  • chart analysis, data comparison
  • statistical trend, significant fluctuation
  • stagnation, steady rise, moderate fall
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