The percentage of overweight children in western societies has increased by almost 20% in the last ten years. Discuss the possible causes and effects of this disturbing trend and offer solution.

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decade cases of obesity
has
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increased by 20
percent
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.
Main
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reasons are eating junk food and lack of physical activities. The most viable solution
of
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this
problem
is promoting healthy eating and exercise by
children
. The overweight
problem
among
children
has grown and
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serious
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concern for society. The main cause of
this
problem
is eating junk
foods
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food
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. Most
of
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children
enjoy
fast-food
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fast food
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instead
of taking healthy
meal
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meals
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which contain carbohydrates, proteins etc.
Furthermore
, lack of exercise by
children
is
also
A major factor
children
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in children
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becoming overweight.
Children
these days do not engage in physical activities like exercises.
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, In
US
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the US
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, Most
children
engage in indoor activities like playing videogames or spending time on social media. To find the way
for
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this
problem
is to inculcate
habit
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the habit
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of eating healthy meals. If
children
eat healthy food their
body
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bodies
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will gain muscles and
loose
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lose
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fat. which will help in reducing body fat in their bodies. Strict diet
pattern
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patterns
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need to follow by them.
Moreover
,Another way of reducing weight is doing exercises like walking, weightlifting and so on. By adopting
exercise
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an exercise
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regime
children
will
loose
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excess body weight and
became
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become
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healthier. To cite an example, In countries like India
children
engage in sports like cricket , football which makes
physically
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them physically
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fit and healthy. In conclusion, to overcome
problem
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the problem
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of overweight among
children
. Habits like healthy eating and exercising
needs
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need
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to be inculcated among them . IT will make them leaner, fitter and strong. simultaneously we will overcome
problem
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the problem
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of obesity among them .
this
will help in controlling obesity in
children
on
worldwide
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a worldwide
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basis.
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