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Children in many countries are eating more fast food and convenience snacks. Why are children doing this and how serious are the consequences?

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In recent times,juveniles are more addicted towards eating street
food
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 rather than fresh home
food
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.In most
of
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the
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nations,
kids
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 prefer to have junk
food
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 and
snacks
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.
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 essay will illustrate
causes
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the causes
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 and consequences respectively.
To begin
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 with,in
this
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 era of
techonology
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technology
,people have hectic
schedule
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 and they do not have time to take care of their
children
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.
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 to
this
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,individuals provide fast
food
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 to their
kids
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restaurants and
cafe
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cafes
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 in
rush
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a rush
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.
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 it becomes
habit
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a habit
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 of
children
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 to have unhealthy
food
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 on
daily
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a daily
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 basis.
Apart from
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this
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,
children
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 find junk
food
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 and
snacks
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scrumptiuos
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scrumptious
 as compared to
home made
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homemade
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food
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.
Thus
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 show more interest in
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visiting
 various
food
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 places.Research has shown that
the
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 significant number of
children
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 eat outside each day. Having unhealthy
food
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 items and
snacks
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everyday
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 will have
adverse
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an adverse
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 impact on the health of
children
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.First of all,
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kids
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 at
younger
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a younger
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age
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ages
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 can suffer from several chronic diseases namely cancer,brain tumour,diabetes and obesity etcetera which can be detrimental
for
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theirselves
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themselves
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.
Moreover
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,if
kids
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 consume sugar candies and chips regularly ,their teeth can be damaged.
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 having bad eating habits would have plenty of disadvantages which is a major issue in the world.
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, if
kids
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 will not abandon
having
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junk
food
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everytime
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 it may
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 to death.
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,
Kids
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eat
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eating
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snacks
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such
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 as chips will cause to death of the juveniles.
To conclude
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,these days
childern
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children
 are more inclined to consume fast
food
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 and
snacks
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 than
having
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fresh and healthy
food
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 which
contain
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contains
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 more
nutrition
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nutritional
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 values.It can be harmful
for
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 the
kids
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 and will have serious results.In
this
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 way,government
as well as
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 parents must take steps to prohibit it.

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Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic

IELTS advantages and disadvantages questions normally give you a statement and ask you to comment on the advantages and disadvantages of that statement.

Answer structure for the type of essay

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – advantages
  • Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • The main advantage is...
  • The disadvantage of this...
  • The main benefit...
  • Despite these advantages...
  • One possible drawback...

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