Some people think that it is beneficial for youngsters to live on their own or with friends after completing school.Do you agree or disagree?

If an opinion poll is conducted among the youngster, to know whether they would like to live on their own/with their
friends
or with their family members; I am sure most of
votes
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favour of living on their own or with their
friends
.
This
will be chosen as it will give them freedom and self-dependency. I am
also
, in favour of the same opinion. The youngster who has just passed the school barely holds any practical knowledge of the world. They
also
lack judgement and decision-making.
Initially
, they would struggle financially
due to
the insufficient amount of
money
.
However
, they will learn to be responsible and self-dependent by earning
money
through attending part-time jobs. They will learn to manage
money
in an effective way. They would learn the value of
money
and start saving
money
to be future-ready. In turn ,
this
will make them financially literate too.
While
living alone or with
friends
, they will need to take up household responsibilities
such
as cleaning, cooking, buying groceries, laundry etc. These tasks learning will teach them discipline and
selfreliance
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self-reliance
self reliance
along with
time management.
On the other hand
, there are downsides to
this
too. Since the youngsters would be relatively inexperienced, they may face difficulties
due to
unavailability
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of guidance from the
parents
. They may lose confidence
due to
mistakes or failures. As we all know life is not all rosy but has sharp thorns too! The
youngesters
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youngsters
who would face frequent adversities may fall prey to mental disorders
such
as anxiety, depression or panic attacks!
Also
, there lurks the danger of getting involved with bad company. They may get involved in various addictions
such
as vaping, smoking, drugs etc
due to
unavailability of parental monitoring, poor judgement and decision making.
This
can ruin someone's life!
Also
, the
parents
can feel lonely or face empty nest syndrome.
However
,
this
can be changed by engaging
parents
in various recreational activities (eg. Yoga, Dancing, Meditation, Gardening etc) with their age mates.
This
will help to alleviate the adverse effects of loneliness. So,
to conclude
I feel that it is beneficial to live on your own or with
friends
.
However
,emotional and mental support can be provided by the
parents
through encouragement and monitoring.
This
will help the youngsters to lead a successful life!
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