The graph below shows the consumption of fish and some different kinds of meat in a European country between 1979 and 2004.

The graph below shows the consumption of fish and some different kinds of meat in a European country between 1979 and 2004.
The illustrated graph depicts the
consumption
of
fish
and some different kinds of meat in a European country between 1979 and 2004.
Generally
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Generally,
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almost all the lines show the decline movement, except one, which is
beef
chicken
consumption
, that showed a gradation. First of all, in 1979 the highest and lowest indexes of
consumption
illustrated
the
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beef
and
fish
consumption
with about 220 and 55
grams
per person per week respectively.
Moreover
, in 1989 two lines of chicken and
beef
consumption
met at the point of 200
grams
per person. Turning to the latest indexes,
highest
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the highest
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mark was shown by chicken
consumption
with about 220
grams
,
whereas
fish
consumption
also
showed the lowest index. The biggest difference between
two
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the two
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years
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was
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the
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beef
consumption
with
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about 120
grams
and the smallest was shown by
fish
consumption
with
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of
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only five
grams
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • consumption
  • fish
  • meat
  • poultry
  • beef
  • lamb
  • trend
  • increase
  • decrease
  • gradual
  • significant
  • fluctuate
  • peak
  • trough
  • steady
  • correlation
  • period
  • data
  • comparison
  • predominant
  • kilograms per capita
  • dietary habits
  • health consciousness
  • sustainability
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