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Some people think young people should be free to choose his or her job，but other people think they should be realistic and think more about their future. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Some have claimed that what occupations youngsters choose are up to them entirely but others say that the youth should be grounded and thoughtful about the road ahead of them. Is there the most sensible choice for teens and young adults? Should they chase their dream or be realistic about their future
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 following your dream. If you were to work a
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Moreover
, money can’t compensate
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For instance
, many teens who sign up for programming in college because
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they heard
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technology
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job
 have a high chance of quitting
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 their lack of enjoyment and failing to catch up with classmates. It can’t be said enough about the dissastification you might get if you don’t follow your dream On the other end, many have made sensible counterarguments
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 a
job
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 their own hatred for their own passion since being forced to do
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is tiring.
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Furthermore
, many dreams are too unrealistic and risky for some people. Examples can be seen in kids who study art and music in higher education, these fields are too competitive and making a living out of them is nigh impossible. It is logical to assume that
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 of following your heart
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 not negligible.
To conclude
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their own path is something that every teen should get. In my opinion, following your passion and being sensible is both crucial so doing one
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without
 the other can lead to an unhappy life.
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