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lots of people take preference to choose their own country as their destination in the future instead of immigrating to other countries to what extent do you agree with this statement

lots of people take preference to choose their own country as their destination in the future instead of immigrating to other countries to what extent do you agree with this statement
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In the future,
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 number of
people
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 will prefer to choose their own
country
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 as their destination rather than travelling abroad on holidays.
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 some
people
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 find travelling in their own
country
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 a wiser choice, I agree with the statement. Some
people
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 believe that in the near future, a larger number of individuals will decide to choose their own
country
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 as their holiday destination.
Tourism
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 industry has become a great source of income in many countries resulting in a significant rise in prices included in travelling abroad.
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, during holidays, well-known touristic destinations will become
over-crowded
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 leading to
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less preference
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travelers
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 to visit
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 spots.
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, I believe spending
holiday
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a holiday
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 in another
country
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 seems to be a greater adventure. Travelling abroad provide
travelers
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travellers
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 with
unvaluable
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invaluable
 experiences
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 being informed about other cultures, food, and language.
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, the undeniable effects of tourism advertisements will lead to an increase in
number
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 of
travelers
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travellers
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.
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, nowadays
people
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 tend to get engaged with social media increasingly, resulting in comparing themselves to influencers who travel to other countries and share their experiences with their followers.
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, visiting other countries has become more accessible in comparison with the past
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 the improvement
oftransportation
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of transportation
. In conclusion,
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 travelling abroad will cause
people
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 to spend most of their savings and, individuals may not be able to enjoy their travel in over-crowded destinations, more
people
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 will choose to spend their holidays travelling in other
countriesbecause
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countries because
 of the undeniable effect of tourism advertisements and famous influencers
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 to the improved transportation.

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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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