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SOME PEOPLE ARE OF THE VİEW THAT HOBBIES NEED TO BE DIFFUCULT FOR PEOPLE TO BE ABLE TO ENJOY THWM WELL.TO WHAT EXTENT DO YOU AGREE OR DISAGREE WITH THE ABOVE STATEMENT?

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THE FOLLOWING ESSAY TAKES A LOOK AT BOTH SIDES OF THE ARGUMENT.SOME PEOPLE CLAIM THAT HOBBIES NEED TO BE DIFFICULT FOR PEOPLE.BECAUSE
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 WAY HELPS TO MORE ENJOY FROM HOBBY.I CAN GIVE EXAMPLES OF
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 KINDS OF ACTIVITIES.
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,GARDENING,PLAYING A MUSICAL INSTRUMENT(
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 AS PLAYING THE GUITAR,PIANO,CELLO),KNITTING,HANDICRAFT WORK,SEWING.THESE ARE DISTINGUISHED BY THEIR DIFFICULTIES.IT NEEDS SOME TOOLS AND ENOUGH PHYSICAL ABILITY FOR GARDENING.PLAYING A MUSICAL INSTRUMENT DEMANDS TALENT.IF YOU WANT TO TAKE UP KNITTING,
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 YOU SHOULD GET COLORED THREADS,NEEDLES, AND YARNS.IT’S FUN AND RELAXING ACTIVITY.BUT IT
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 HAS DIFFICULT SIDES WHICH REQUIRE MORE PATIENCE.LET’S TALK ABOUT HANDICRAFTS WHICH ARE MORE STRESS BUSTER AND HAVE CALMING EFFECTS.EVEN
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 IT TAKES MORE
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,EVERYONE IS RELIEVED WHEN THEY SEE THE RESULT.SEWING IS
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 HARD WORK.FIRST AND FOREMOST IT NEEDS A SEWING MACHINE WHICH IS AUTOMATED.
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 PROGRAMME IS SELECTED RELEVANT TO CLOTH MATERIAL.
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, WE SHOULD DRAW SKETCHES OF CLOTHING AND SO ON.But I DON’T AGREE WITH
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 SIDE.THAT’S WHY I WANT TO WRITE ABOUT THE OTHER ONE.
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 SOME PEOPLE PASTIMES SHOULD BE EASIER AND HELP EVERYONE UNWIND.
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, READING,WATCHING FILMS,HANGING OUT,TRAVELLING,GOING SHOPPING AND SO ON.MOVIES HELP TO RELAX AND DON’T DEMAND ANY ADDITIONAL EFFORT.JUST ALLOWS US TO THROW OUT THE STRESS OF WORK, AND LIFE PROBLEMS FOR A TEMPORARY
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.THE SECOND IS MEETING WITH FRIENDS,GROUPMATES, AND RELATIVES AND IT’S INTERESTING TO SPEND SPARE
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 WITH THEM.TRAVELLING CREATES A WIDE OUTLOOK.
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,SEEING ANY CULTURAL AND HISTORICAL PLACES IS MORE REMEMBERABLE RATHER THAN HEARING ABOUT THEM.WE CAN
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 BUSY WITH TAKING PHOTOGRAPHS OF SCENERY IN THE
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 OF
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 ACTIVITY.WE CAN GO SHOPPING WHENEVER WE ARE BORED.IT REDUCE STRESS AND ISN’T CONSIDERED COMPLICATED.IN CONCLUSION, I THINK THAT ACTIVITIES ARE DEFINITELY IMPORTANT FOR EACH OF US.
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Structure your answers in logical paragraphs

The easiest way to score well on the IELTS Task 2 writing portion is to structure your writing in a solid essay format.

A strong argument essay structure can be split up into 4 paragraphs, each containing 4 sentences (except the conclusion paragraph, which only contains 3 sentences).

Stick to this essay structure:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

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