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The bar chart compares the amount of money (in millions of euros) that people in four different age groups from Paris, France, spent on going to the cinema, restaurants and music concerts in 2019.

The bar chart compares the amount of money (in millions of euros) that people in four different age groups from Paris, France, spent on going to the cinema, restaurants and music concerts in 2019.
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The bar chart shows how much Parisians of different age groups spent on seeing movies, eating out and going to concerts in 2019.
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, the highest amount of money was spent on going to restaurants (about €69
million
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), compared with going to the cinema (near to €40
million
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) and music concerts (
also
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 around €40
million
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). The 40-55 age group spent the most on going to restaurants at about €22000000,
while
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 the 18-25 age group spent the least with only €13000,000. With a total amount of approximately €12
million
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, the 26−39 category had the highest spending on going to the cinema
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 the 56−80s spent the least money, at around €8000000.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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